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RaVeNiE_P.R.S.
09-20-2006, 03:00 AM
:o here it goes...

i like him,
but he likes someone else.
i don't know who,
but i have a guess.
a girl who's perfect
in sports and music,
in something that i
can't master without magic..
she's also pretty, popular
and rich
she even belongs in a group
of long-haired, beautiful girls..
even though she's all that,
it's just a guess.
i want him to be mine
whatever anyone says
step by step, he'll fall
for me
with less suffering
that there will be.
in my life, i learned one
thing,
to fall for someone
is such a serious thing.


see? it's not that good..but could you tell me what do you think of it?

ZeroEverlast
09-20-2006, 03:11 AM
I agree!

It's not that good.


ALSO

You appear to be some kind of crazy stalker-person!

RaVeNiE_P.R.S.
09-20-2006, 06:22 AM
ALSO

You appear to be some kind of crazy stalker-person!

you think so?

El Wiseguy
09-20-2006, 06:28 AM
It's actually a pretty good poem. I have to say it's got its own life and its own flow. It's a bit creepy, lol. But that's ok. It's interesting and I enjoyed reading it.

RaVeNiE_P.R.S.
09-20-2006, 06:30 AM
thanks.

InuYashaCool
09-20-2006, 09:05 PM
mine didnt ryhme but it made sense
good poem it ryhmed, and it made sense
*applaudes for Ravine PRS*
check out my poem the thread is called "Time"

ZeroEverlast
09-21-2006, 02:24 AM
you think so?

Kinda, yeah...

RaVeNiE_P.R.S.
09-21-2006, 03:22 AM
\
check out my poem the thread is called "Time"


i've read it...it's good, i like it.:thumbs:

demontenchi
09-21-2006, 03:31 AM
NOt all poems have to ryhme, so its GOOD ^^

RaVeNiE_P.R.S.
09-21-2006, 03:32 AM
Kinda, yeah...

i may sound like that, but...NO i am not a stalker...

demontenchi
09-21-2006, 04:03 AM
LOL yeah mybe she just likes to look at him alot but is to shy to talk to him ^^