Losing You To Sleep

[El Wiseguy]

This is a poem I wrote about the movements of a sword and how it relates to losing someone... the fluid motion of such a graceful object can still tear through the very fabric of life. The picture is meant to enhance the poetry not the other way around. :)




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Losing You To Sleep


Seemless and streamless,
I'm losing you to sleep.
Fading and waiting,
How long can I keep?

Slicing and dicing,
Through the thick and thin.
Over and over,
Til you break my skin.

Falling and falling,
Slipping farther away.
Cutting and jutting,
I knew someday I'd pay.

Ripping and dripping,
Til all the blood is gone.
Losing and Failing,
Hid 'til the early dawn.

Keeping and reaping,
Everything I've sown.
Kissing and caressing,
No longer these, I'll know.

Oh no, not now...
I'm losing you to sleep.
Forever and Ever,
You've gone away from me...

--Brian 7:25 PM 8/23/2005

[demontenchi]

Really good wise did not know u could make poetry-really good

The picture really goes with the poem Good

[El Wiseguy]

Thanks. :)

[CheeSy]

Wow you are good at poetry, Maybe you can help me with my school work on Poetry soon :)

BTW, wat kind of poem is this? xD

[Fallen_Angel]

I don't like this one as much as some of the other poems you have written. But that could be due to the first lines and third lines being rhymed, then the second and fourth lines rhyming with one another and those kinds of poems almost seem forced to me. Because people usually try to rhyme there poems and it doesn't usually work. But I will agree that this poem does work well with the picture.

[Narkumi]

El Wise, u have a beautiful mind. lol

I love it :thumbs:

[FANTASY FAN]

:D your a pure natural:D

[El Wiseguy]

Thanks... *blushes like a little school girl*

[rukia96]

love it. your a wonderful writer :D

[KatandMouse]

Rukia...! Quit bringing back old threads. NAO.