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CoreyBato
04-03-2007, 05:28 AM
I lay here now, the images of my past blurring my vision. In them, I mostly see you...my lost love, the one I left behind to come to this cursed place full of death. I think back to the day I left, standing in your room, dressed in my creased down uniform, staring at you as you cry bitter tears of pain and sadness. Sadness, at my betrayal, my abandonment of you. I try to hold you, you push me away and tell me to leave.
*Go fight your war, you bastard!* you scream at me. I put my head down and walk away, wearing my cowardice on my sleeve, the pride I thought I would feel now gone forever.
I see your eyes now, dark and full of life, of happiness. Your hair, shimmering black in the bright sun. I was beginning to see your face, but it was blocked out by Burke as he bent over me.
*Oh shit no. Corey, stay with me man, you're going to fine okay. You're going to be just fine. Medic! Someone get a goddamn Medic over here!* He pulls what's left of my helmet off my head and pulls me close to him. I feel him put his hand on my stomach, and how wet it is. Somehow, through my the one eye that I have left I manage to look down at my ravaged body, the one that used to hold you as you slept in the bed we shared so often, and I see things on the outside that should be inside and I cry out. Burke looks back at, me tears pouring from his eyes.
*Don't worry Core, helps on the way.* At this moment I begin to cry, as I realize that I will never see you again. I will never see your pretty brown eyes, feel your skin against mine, or kiss your soft lips ever again. I cry as I realize I have brought you more pain with my death. I cry as I realize how stupid I was. Thinking of honor and glory instead of love and devotion...to you. The bright light of the desert sun begins to grow faint, the heat of the road side bomb that went off in front of our caravan begins to dissapear with all other feeling.
*Kayla* your name passes through my lips, the last thing I will ever say, as I fade into darkness. Goodbye my lost love, please forgive me...

Hion
04-03-2007, 05:57 AM
Very good I liked it :thumbs:

Kosugi
04-13-2007, 06:47 AM
Very nice! You deserve some noodles for that!

Anastashia Sage
04-13-2007, 06:49 AM
excellant. omg i could never do that good.

KatandMouse
04-13-2007, 06:54 AM
Wow... that was awesome...

rukia96
06-25-2007, 08:56 AM
not so crazy about the speaking but i thought it was pretty good
:D