PDA

View Full Version : Daisy's Pokemon Quest


Soshe
02-09-2007, 05:13 PM
Ok, this is kinda crappy because I started it in fifth grade, but I'm doing my best to polish it up.
------

Author’s note: Daisy can speak Pokelanguage, the language of Pokemon. So when you see a Pokemon speak in English, it’s being translated from Pokelanguage.
Also, Ombreon looks like an Umbreon except she has more yellow rings and a blue jewel on her forehead and she speaks English. So, when you see her speaking in English, it’s in English!

Sunday, June 30th, 11 P.M.:
I’m Daisy, a girl from Pallet Town. Tomorrow, I turn nine and can get my first Pokemon. I will choose as my Pokemon, Pikachu.

Monday, Day 1, July 1st, 2 A.M.:
I do my normal morning routine as quietly as possible, so I don’t wake Mom up. I grab my flashlight and head down to Professor Oak’s lab. When I get there, I knock on the door. He comes to the door and says, “Do you know what time it is?!”
I say, “It’s two-twelve in the morning.”
“Exactly my point,” he grumbles.
“I wanted to get here early so I can begin my journey,” I tell him.
“Come in,” he says. “The lab doesn’t open until five A.M.”
”Can I please choose my Pokemon?” I ask.
(I pester Oak until he caves in.) “Oh fine!” he half yells. “Choose any one you want.”
“Can I have Pikachu?” I eagerly ask him.
“Ok, but keep in mind to keep it out of its ball,” Oak says. All of a sudden, Nurse Joy bursts through the lab doors.
“What’s the problem?” I ask.
Nurse Joy responds, “Somebody dropped this Pokemon off in front of the Viridian Pokemon center. I don’t know what kind of trainer would dump such a sweet Pokemon into the streets like that. Would you be interested in this Pokemon by any chance, Daisy?”
“Sure,” I say. “Professor, can I also have Pikachu?”
“Sorry, Daisy, you know the rules: only one starter Pokemon per trainer. This Eevee will be your starter Pokemon,” Professor Oak states.

Mon, Day 1, 3 A.M.:
My new Eevee is sleeping. Wait a second! It has light green dots on its mane! I’ll call it Eewee (oo-wee)! Just then, it evolves! I’ll call the evolution Ombreon.

Mon, Day 1, 5 A.M.:
Ash comes into the lab and asks, “Can I have Pikachu?”
“Ok,” Oak says, handing Ash the Pokeball.
(I just wake up.) “Wha’s goin’ on?” I ask groggily, rubbing my eyes.
“Daisy,” Ash says, “what are you doing here?”
Just then, Ombreon says, “What’s going on? WHERE AM I?” Oak, Ash and I just stand there, our mouths gaping open.
“Hi,” I say, “I’m Daisy, your new trainer.”
“NOOOOO!” Ombreon yells. “Why am I black? Some Butterfree put me to sleep with Sleep Powder. How did I get here?”


Mon, Day 1, 8 A.M.:
“Well,” I say, “Nurse Joy brought you here. I took you. During the night, you evolved and called you Ombreon.”
“My real name is Crystal, but you can call me anything you want,” Ombreon says.

Mon, Day 1, 10 A.M.:
Ash and I depart from Pallet Town and see a Pidgey. “I’ll catch it!” I say. “Ombreon, use Aurora Beam!” That knocks Pidgey out! “Pokeball, GO!” I yell. Pidgey is mine! “YES! I got Pidgey!”
“How did you know Ombreon knows Aurora Beam?” Ash inquires.
“I-I don’t know,” I say.

Mon, Day 1, Noon:
“We’ve been walking for hours!” Ash complains.
“I’m hungry, too,” I state.
Ash stops and inquires, “Wait a minute. How did you know I’m hungry?”
“Ash, it’s about time I’ve told you after all these years. I have telepathy. Ya know, when you can communicate through minds or read somebody else’s? That’s how I knew Ombreon knows Aurora Beam,” I tell Ash.
“Look,” Ombreon says, “a bush with edible.”
“Pidgey,” I say, “I choose you! Check to make sure those berries aren’t poisonous!” (Ombreon just shrugs.) “Don’t worry. (Talking to Ash.) I have numerous healing items to cure different aliments such as Antidote for poisoning.” Pidgey’s just eating away at those berries. “Hey! Save some for us!” As we pick the berries, we see the notorious Team Rocket. (They’re a band of thieves that try to steal Pokemon from innocent trainers.) They’re hated throughout the Kanto, Orange Islands and Jhoto Regions. “Ombreon, use Aurora Beam!”
As they fly off, they yell, “Team Rocket’s blasting off again!”
“Piece of cake,” I say.

Mon, Day 1, 2 P.M.:
We arrive in Viridian City. Officer Jenny sees Ash carrying his Pikachu. “Hold it,” she says.
“Officer Jenny, this is my Pikachu,” Ash explains.
“Can you prove it?” she asks.
“Yes, he can,” I say, grabbing Ash’s Pokedex from his pocket.
I open it, press a button and it says, “I am Dexter, a Pokedex programmed by Professor Oak. I was programmed for Pokemon trainer Ash Ketchum. If destroyed or stolen, I cannot be replaced.”
“Ok, I believe you,” she says. She lets us go. When we get to the center, Nurse Joy says, “Hi Daisy, how’s the Eevee?”
“She wasn’t an Eevee, she was an Eewee,” I answer. “While she was sleeping, she evolved.”

Mon, Day 1, 3 P.M.:
We decide to stay until morning. “Hey,” I say to Ash, “let’s go... Ombreon, here. Eat these. They’re Rare Candy. One boosts you up one level. You’re at level twenty, so you’ll have to eat eighty. Eat fifty right now. You can eat the other thirty tomorrow. They won’t make you full, so don’t worry.” I put them in a bowl and let her eat them.

Mon Day 1, 5 P.M.:
“I’m hitting the hay,” I say. “Night. Ombreon, turn into a Butterfree and use Sleep Powder on me? Pidgey, go! Pidgey, go to sleep.”
“Good night Daisy,” Pidgey says. Ombreon turns into a Butterfree and uses Sleep Powder on me.

Tues, Day 2, July 2nd, 9 A.M.:
“Ombreon, time to eat the other thirty Rare Candy,” I say. She eats them, so now she’s at level 100.

Tues, Day 2, 10 A.M.:
Ombreon and I head to Viridian Gym. “I challenge the Gym Leader!” I say to the guards.
“Enter,” they say.
“Come out, Giovanni!” I yell.
“How did you...?” Giovanni starts.
“I have a book that tells about every gym leader here in Kanto,” I say flatly. “Professor Oak gave it to me three years ago! Let’s get this battle underway already!”
“We’ll battle in an hour,” Giovanni says.
“Now,” I say.
“Fine,” he says. I climb onto the platform opposite to him.
“One Pokemon,” Giovanni says.
“I choose Ombreon,” I say.
“I choose Mewtwo.”
\sect cf2 Ombreon, I think to my Pokemon, turn into an Umbreon.
Why? she thinks back to me.
Mewtwo is weak against Dark type.
She does it. “Umbreon,” I say.
“Whoa, whoa, whoa,” Giovanni says. “How did you gent an Umbreon onto the field? This is a one-on-one Pokemon battle.”
“Ombreon can transform into anything,” I state.
Hmm, Giovanni thinks, this is a rare and valuable Pokemon. The girl is only ten. I’ll go easy on her.
“I’m nine,” I tell Giovanni. “Don’t hold back. Ombreon can take anything you throw at her. Ombreon, use Double Team and Aurora Beam!”
She doesn’t move a muscle.“Mewtwo, use Psychic!” Giovanni says.
“Wait a minute. Neither Pokemon is obeying us. I think that they’re dummies,” I say.

Soshe
02-09-2007, 05:19 PM
Er, sorry for the double post, but the crappy school computers won't let me edit my last post. I just wanted to say that there's a LOT more to this story than just this. If any of you like it, I'll post more. I posted this on a Pokemon forum and everyone hated it. It took me FOUR years to write this. It'll get better; trust me. I'm still typing it out; this is just the first couple pages. It'll eventually get better...

InuYashaCool
02-09-2007, 09:18 PM
Omberon = no
Umberon = yes
I played pokémon gold, Silver, and crystal I know how that pokemon's name is spelled

Soshe
02-09-2007, 09:40 PM
ooc: Ombreon is a Pokemon I made up a long time ago. It's not a mispelling. I'm just asking: didn't you read the author's note?

InuYashaCool
02-09-2007, 10:48 PM
no

Soshe
02-09-2007, 11:27 PM
:lmao: You're supposed to read the author's note. It's for the author to tell the reader something. :D You can tell I'm not being mean about it; I just kinda find it a bit comical for some reason... :D

Princess
06-14-2007, 01:40 AM
Um...your story is.....nice.

rejincx
06-14-2007, 02:25 AM
Your story, hm check the format, I havent read many fan fics but I'm sure that its not suppose to list the day, if you want to go in that direction though approach it from a "diary" point of view..since its alreadly in first person it shouldnt be that hard. I sorry honestly dont have time to read all of it, but I've just been inspired by that fact that you've been working on it for OMG 4 years??!!! well keep it up!! It's encouraged me to keep on with my writing as well so thanks for that moment of inspiration! also... try reading other fan fics, dont only focus on what happening, but the words they used and the grammer, how things are presented, just pay really close attention, also read more books about writing if you really want to do better. GOOD LUCK!

sarcaustic
06-14-2007, 06:21 AM
The format is pretty cool and fits the journey thing. Keep it up!!

InuYashaCool
04-18-2008, 03:07 AM
:lmao: You're supposed to read the author's note. It's for the author to tell the reader something. :D You can tell I'm not being mean about it; I just kinda find it a bit comical for some reason... :D

sorry too lazy for now on Ombereon is now Umbreon